For Miranda Lin

Miranda,

I decided to cover style and word sense issues before going into grammar.

In general, I'm recommending these steps:

  1. Reread your proposal.
  2. Carefully read my notes, alongside your proposal. If you have any questions, email me, or catch me at work. Unfortunately, I don't have a copy of my schedule on hand—I keep it at work, and check it before I go home! Perhaps I'll post it here later.
  3. Rewrite/touch up your proposal, trying to acheive the goals I suggest.
  4. Contact me again, and I'll have another go at your proposal.
Keep well! And thanks for confiding in me on this. I do hope it helps!

Oh! It appears you have μSoft Office 2007. Nonetheless, I've saved both 2003 and 2007 versions of my comments, below.

          —raz